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Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less and less time with their parents. What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?

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Many contemporary families have mothers and fathers working and
as a consequence
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,
parents
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 are spending less time with their offspring. The main cause is an increasing number of graduated females from universities and the primary problems are misbehaviour of their
children
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 and
children
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 will grow up without their
parents
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' love. Nowadays, women are attending schools more than before. In the past, the number of female students was quite low and families preferred to keep their daughters at home to help their mothers in households.
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, people were generally poor to afford school expenses and education institutes were not so common.
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, in Turkey, currently, the number of female pupils is nearly the same compared with men even in some cities they are the majority. If both
parents
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 are working during the day, they need to hire a babysitter for their offspring .
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, they will not be able to use most of their time with their
children
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 which is so important for them. Another issue is that
children
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 will behave differently than their
parents
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 because they have no roll-model to imitate and
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, they will act like they see either on TV or the people who are taking care of them during working hours.
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, in France, one research showed that a baby who is raised by a babysitter started to speak the first mother tongue of his carer
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 of the baby's
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.
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, women are enrolling in third-level education more than before and,
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, babies are raised without their
parents
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.
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, offspring are acting not like their
parents
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 and they are growing up lack of love from their
parents
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.
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