The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA are in fast-food restaurant between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA are in fast-food restaurant between 2003 and 2013.
The graph illustrates how often
the
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American eating
fast-food
from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is most people had
fast-food
once a week from 2003 to 2006
while
most of them spent
one
or two times having
fast-food
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fast food
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per month in 2013. Another striking factor is that there are some people who had never taken a
fast-food
meal during the period between 2003 and 2013. In 2003, most
of
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the
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American eating
fast-food
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fast food
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once a week,
it
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is a bit higher than the figure of
one
to two times a month, 31% and 30% respectively.
In contrast
, there was a change in rank in 2013,
while
the
quantity
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of people taking a
fast-food
meal
one
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once
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a week gained a decrease, the figure of
one
-two
times
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time
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saw a downward trend, 28% against 33%.
One
prominent feature of
this
data is not only the figure of never but
also
the data of having
fast-food
experienced a little decrease
by
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aproximately
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approximately
2% over the period.
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