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Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening ? what can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced ?

#rubbish #governments #amount
In the recent age,
people
 contribute to producing a lot of litter. it is undeniable that the increasing
population
 affects to rise in
waste
 production.
This
 essay will discuss elaborately the causes and solution of
this
 problem. Let’s start by looking at the causes of rising litter nowadays. One of the causes is the
population
 of
people
 grow at an astonishing rate and it results in more production of
rubbish
, particularly household
waste
 compared to the past. Another cause is
people
 unaware of
waste
 management issues. It means that
people
 do not consider how to manage
waste
 correctly and perhaps they tend to focus only on how to fulfil their needs.
For instance
, based on The Ministry of Environment and Forest Republic Indonesia report in 2023 the
population
 of Indonesia growing sharply and have a similar trend with the amount of
rubbish
. It can not be denied that the rising
population
 will be affected
to
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by
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increasing
Correct article usage
the increasing
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 of
rubbish
. Turning to some solutions.
It is clear that
 some ways could be taken by the
government
. One of the best acts to tackle
this
 problem
;
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government
 should provide new rules that regulate the ways to manage
waste
 correctly.
Following
this
, new regulation not only allows some approaches how to manage it but
also
 offers punishment for
people
 who can not follow the rule. The second action to overcome
this
 problem
government
 perhaps should make a collaborative program with Non-
Government
 organisations (NGOs) like World Clean Day Up community that concentrates on litter management issues,
such
 as a campaign program, and influence
people
 directly with action.
Consequently
, the increase in
rubbish
 is impacted by the rising
population
 with low awareness of environmental issues, especially
waste
 management.
However
,
people
 believe that the rising of
rubbish
 can be a crucial issue nowadays.
Hence
, it should be tackled quickly by the
government
 with some approaches that are noticed above.
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