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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your opinion.

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Human activity has a huge impact on
animals
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 and
plants
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 around the world. Deforestation, pollution, and global warming are serious problems caused by human
actions
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. Some
people
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 believe that human activity can not make a major impact on
plants
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 and
animals
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.
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,they are pros and cons of human
actions
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/ on the species. I will deliberate on both sides and try to draw conclusions.
First,
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there are several drawbacks of human behaviour
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 the environment,
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, deforestation can cause a series
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problem
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 as some
animals
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 and
plants
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 lose their natural habitats. Overpopulation plays a major factor in
this
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 context. As you know, when the number of
people
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 increased, that means more land
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 needed for building homes, so the rate of deforestation would increase.
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, overpopulation increases the level of pollution
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 many activities
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 as transportation.
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,
people
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 need more natural
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 to eat and
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 increase the demand for natural
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. Turning to the other side,there are a few
actions
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 that could reduce the harmful sequences of human
actions
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such
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 as
people
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 should be green consumers.
People
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 should try their best to consume fewer
resources
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 and reduce the emission of carbon dioxide.
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,using solar systems and renewable energy
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 of fuel.
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, recycling
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 would reduce the
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 consumption of the available
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, there are tremendous impacts on
plants
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 and
animals
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 even though there are some
actions
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 that help to degrade the harmful effects of humans on the natural habitat. I'm firmly opposed that human
actions
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 could not make harmful impacts on
animals
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 and
plants
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.
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