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some people think that all university students should study whatever

some people think that all university students should study whatever
#people #university #students #study
Nowadays, many people go to university to
improving
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 their
skill
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skills
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 or knowledge. But an issue occurred
which
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about should student choice the
program
 which they are interested in or the other one which can earn money
more
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easier. From my perspective,
choice
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 your favorite to study, the advantage will overweight the disadvantage. There are some cons
of
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to
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 studying the useful
program
.
Firstly
, you must be very smart or you
wil
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will
 have a long time to struggling
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you
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 homework and it always
take
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 a huge period to be an expert in
those domain
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.
Secondly
, you
fell
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feel
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stressful
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 when you are learning the knowledge or skill
as well as
 you going to work. Because all of the jobs require you
having
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 enough domain know-how and concern every detail.
Lastly
, if unlucky, you don’t love those
program
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, mentioned above will make you unhappy and your
carrer
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career
 possibly stop at the point when you graduate,
you
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 don’t have the courage to improve your skill to the next level.
However
,
choice
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choosing
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 the
program
 which interested you have these pros.
To begin
 with, you will immersive yourself in what you liked, you won’t
fell
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feel
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stressful
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 but
an
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power will ask you
learning
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to learn
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 more knowledge. Even
the
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 homework or report
are
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is
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 numerous, you enjoy finishing them.
Then
,
merger
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 the interesting and job together is a lucky thing, work is not just a daily task, that will be a goal you want to achieve
everyday
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.
Finally
, It’s not only the popular
program
 but
also
 the export of each domain can earn a lot. When you do the thing which you liked
everyday
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, you will be the elite over time. In conclusion,
happy
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happiness
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 is the most important thing in your life, money it’s not everything.
Therefor
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, study what you like, I believe that your life will
different
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than
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from
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