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Some people believe that to be successful at a sport, you need natural ability, ‎and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss ‎both views, and give your opinion?

#people #sport #ability #‎and #work #practice #‎both
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natural
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the natural
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ability
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they
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are Luckier than others.
In other words
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, they don’t have to learn from the beginning.
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Additionally
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 they might be famous if they develop their abilities. One good illustration of
this
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 is Lionel Messi. Now he is the best football player in the world . When he was young he loved football and created his
ability
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 and became successful.
On the other hand
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, you can be successful without
ability
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. You need just to love the sport you want to be successful at.
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, you have to be
hard- working
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.
Furthermore
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, you need to practice every single day.
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 , my sister enjoys
to watch
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 people play chess , so I encourage her to start playing on
iPad
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her iPad
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 . And I know she is hard-working . Luckily after one
month
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 it was
compaction
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a compaction
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 between schools and she joined.
As a result
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, she won. In conclusion, you don’t have to have
natural
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a natural
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ability
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 to be successful,
they
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 just need to be passion person. Personally, I believe that when you
continuous
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 practice , you will be better than
who
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those who
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 have natural
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ability
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abilities
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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