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Band 4

Students in a school should learn academic subjects and pass exams. Other skills such as cookery, dressmaking, and woodwork can be learned from family and friends. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is discussed, one group of
people
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 thinks that the only purpose of
movie
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the movie
a movie
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 is to entertain,
while
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 others believe it
have
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 to be educational. Many
people
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 watch movies after work just for relaxing or trying to forget about problems.
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, if you worked hard the whole day, you would prefer to watch something simple, like comedy or
sitcom
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a sitcom
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 with stupid jokes. Of course, it
is
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also
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 depends on your mood and if everything is bad for you now, you will prefer to watch drama.
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, you may like something that
force
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 you to be in suspense and in
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way
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 you will watch detective or thriller. Anyway, all of them watch different
kind
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 of movies without any expectation of deep meaning, unlike another group of
people
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, who need to see more than
simple
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a simple
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 plot
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 film watching, something more complicated, which
discussed
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is discussed
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 between critics about its meaning.
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,
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this
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people
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 try to watch movies, recognizing some
problem
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problems
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 of relations between
man
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men
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 and
woman
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women
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, policy and government etc. and the main purpose of watching
to
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is to
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 educate
something for yourself
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themselves
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. Today the industry of movie production is so developed, that it is really difficult for producers to create something new,
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that
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which
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 is why
thy
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they
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 try to amaze viewers
making
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 sense
with
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of
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 unusual
form
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forms
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, like ‘Dogville’ by Lars
fon
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Fon
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 Trier.
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 I would like to tell that in my opinion both
kind
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kinds
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 of opinion are possible and
film
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a film
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 must be chosen depending on your preference for one or another day.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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