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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram
illustartes
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illustrates
 the manufacturing
bricks
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of bricks
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 process for
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the bulding
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bulding
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building
 industry.The manufacturing process
take
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ssix
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six
 stages. as we see,
First
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the First
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stage
 is digr for getting the
clay
.
Second,
filtering
stage
 they throw the
clay
 into
metal
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the metal
a metal
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 grid to clear the
clay
 and after that
adding
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 sand and water to mix it
togather
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together
 with
clay
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the clay
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. Third ,
moving
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move
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 all the way to
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the wier
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wier
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wire
 cutter to get the shape of
briks
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bricks
, and go to the
temlate
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template
.Fourthly they put the bricks in the drying oven for 24-48hrs,Than
thay
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they
 have the kiln
who
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which
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 has two
heatting
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heating
leveals
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levels
,Moderate 200c-980c and high
leveal
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level
 870c-1300c . after
that
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 it
move
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 forward to the cooling room,for a period ranging from
48-72hrs
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48-72 hours
.Fifth is
packing
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the packing
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stage
 and
final
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the final
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stage
 is delivery
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage, clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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