The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart shows the spending of citizens in different
age
groups in the UK in 2004, containing the comparison of three different categories.
It is clear that
the proportion of spending on Food and Drink increasing by the
age
groups gradually
while
the other two
shows
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show
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a disordered trend. Looking at the information in more detail, older people spent the most in the Food and drink category, making up nearly 23%,
while
younger citizens spent less.
Similarly
, the spending on entertainment rose with the
age
from the first
group
to the fourth
group
but jumped to approximately 12% for the
last
group
.
In contrast
, the spending on
restaurant
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restaurants
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and
hotel
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hotels
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shows a
basically
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drop trend with the
age
group
raises, except for the special 61-75
age
group
. 61-75
age
group
show the largest gap in different categories, who spent most in entertainment and spent least in
resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
and hotel when compared to different
age
groups.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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