Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that schools are the best places to learn this. Discuss both these views.

all of the
people
can learn with everything and whenever you do that. not only
parents
must teach their
children
but
also
, they can learn from their
children
. the School is a place students for
learning
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about the material subject, but most important
children
must learn from their families. I will discuss
about
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this
statement. no matter the best place for
children
get to learn.
i
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think all
people
can learn whenever, and wherever. not only
children
must learn, but
also
the elder must learn everything.
i
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knew the quotes about
learn
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and said never stop learning because life never stops teaching. the number of
people
who could be taught or learn to be wonderful members of citizens. we are all
people
never alone in life
,
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because we need someone to help us.
for example
, based on experience my sister want to take a bath and they said help me for taking a bath, and the
parents
can learn about the be patient if their
child
have
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a tantrum or
annoyed
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while
walking with them. we as be an individual person is not perfect, sometimes
the
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parents
make mistakes
to
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child
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and order it. we can say all
parents
are always true about their experiences but we must be wise to think if we could get the best for our
child
. schools are just places for students to get information about growth cognitive, psicomotoric and character. family is important as
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foundation for a
child
to get information. many others think the
child
is imagined by the
parents
, and
i
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think the
parent's
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parents
parent
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are role
model
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for their
child
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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