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Tourism is ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individual and society?

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Introduction
Tourist play
pivotal
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 role in the world and growing
economics
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economies
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Moreover
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this
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 increased day by day in the countries.
This
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 essay will
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of
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how
to
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tourism
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 vital role in high industries.
Body · 1
To begin
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 with,
tourism
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continuely
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continued
increased
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to increase
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from
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in
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last
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the last
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 some years.
This
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 is very good for
economy
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the economy
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developing
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to develop
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.
Therefore
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,
traveller
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travellers
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 invest lots of money
of
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in
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 their trips
such
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 as hotels,
accomodations
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accommodation
accommodations
, food
as well as
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transpotation
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transportation
 for going
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to another
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another places
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another place
other places
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 and
throughing
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throughout
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the circle
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circle
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circles
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 many people earn
beautiful
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 income.
due to
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this
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 , visitors spend large of money to
surve
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survive
 in places.
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 Dubai report the
visitors
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increase
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30
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by 30
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% few
last
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 years as
instastructure
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infrastructure
 and facilities more
impore
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improved
to
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in
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 past years.
Body · 2
furthurmore
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Furthermore
,
tourism
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 gives more
opportunites
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opportunities
 masses for employment.
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, Individuals gets
job
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a job
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 in hotels,
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and restrurents
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restrurents
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restaurants
 as earn
best
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the best
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 daily pay
sold
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for sold
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 out
home made
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home-made
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 and
hand made
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handmade
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 products without any
deficulties
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difficulties
.
Beside
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, human contact with
religious
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the religious
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 and
culture
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cultural
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like
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apply
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value
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values
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 of regions.
for instance
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, Amritsar is
most
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the most
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 famous tourist place now
due to
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history
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its history
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 as everyday
tourist
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tourists
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 visited in large
of
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apply
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numbers. Well, it is
main
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the main
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 source of income
of
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for
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 every
individuals
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individual
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 and contribution
in
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to
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 society.
Conclusion
to include,
tourism
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play
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plays
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 manager role in
growing
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the growing
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 economy of our nation and upgrade of places and societies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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