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The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the comparative analysis of six
population
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 indicators in
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 in 1980 and 2002.
Overall
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, the picture provides the total of residents, the
population
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 of genders, the elder and newborn
population
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 and the average annual
population
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 growth.
Initially
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, there were 14.7 million Australians and a minor 1 million people in
Malaysia
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. In 2002,
Malaysia
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 grew rapidly 2002 to 24.3 million people
whereas
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 only 19.6 Australians were in the same period. Both countries' gender was almost equal, but there was a negligible comparison that females in
Australia
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 were more, and
Malaysia
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 the opposite. Moving to others remaining,
Malaysia
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 with a higher birth rate in the period given.
However
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, all of them declined during 22 years. In fact,
Australia
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 started with 1.5%, reducing to 1.3%.
Malaysia
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 with 3.2% in the initial survey
in contrast
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 to 2.2% in 2002. Compare to the average annual
population
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 growth,
Malaysia
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 (2.4%) was double
Australia
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's rate (1.2%) but significantly fell to 2.1%
while
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Australia
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 increased to 1.3% in the next statistic.
Furthermore
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, the elder
population
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 markedly increased in both countries,
Australia
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 from 9.6% to 12.4%, and
Malaysia
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 began with 3.7%, coming to 4.3% eventually.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, australia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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