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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table data set is a representation of the habits of the non-working British population over the course of the
last
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 year.
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, early in the
day
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 both genders are keener on taking up activities requiring higher energy expenditure,
such
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 as house chores or running errands.
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, later hours are reserved for recreation and socialisation, despite the fact that females may keep busy with housework throughout the day. As for the male
distributionon
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distribution
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, shopping and housekeeping are
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 activities in the mornings, averaging 20 per
cent
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 and the latter 19 per
cent
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, respectively. The afternoons are set for relaxation with the most popularular activity being reading with 9 per
cent
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 and bed-rest as the second most wanted habit. Evenings are with the dominating activity being job hunting both morning and afternoon. As for the female population, housekeeping, shopping and job hunting are
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 the ideal
choice
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 for the mornings. Housework average 49 per
cent
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 and is the most appealing habit. It is noteworthy that women tend to continue
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 energy-demanding engagements into the evenings, if not choosing to dedicate their spare time to watching TV, which is a preferable option with a 12 per
cent
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 result. Female gender people choose bed rest as the least favourite evening

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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