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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. At least 150 words

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The given plans illustrate how a change in a community
park
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’s infrastructure between 1992 and now.
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, There have been many changes to the facilities of the
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 as the addition or removal of items since 1992.
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, it can be obvious that items were relocated during the same period. First of all, in the centre of the
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 the Fountain which was replaced with a
Rose
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garden
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 , was knocked down . To the west of the centre , four seating areas have been moved to new places, which surround the
Rose
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Garden
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. In the northwest of the
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park
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 there were remain a
Rose
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garden
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 .
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, the
Rose
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garden
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 in the South site was flattened . On the left-hand side of the new
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, the previous state for musicians has been innovated to become Amphitheatre for concerts .
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 , in the East of the
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 , the previous
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garden
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, glasshouse and pond for water plants were respectively replaced with a café store , water feature and Children’s play area . At the moment , there is a new Entrance car
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 erected in the underground.
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