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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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The given table and pie charts provide statistics about the
budget
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 of the
police
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about
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apply
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the source of money and the way of its distribution in a city of Britain in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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,the
allocated
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 found was higher in 2018 than the previous year.
In addition
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,National Government supported the highest amount of bill
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spent on the salaries of officers and staff.
According to
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 the given table, there are three sources which provide the
budget
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 for the
police
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, namely National Government, Local Taxes and grants.National Government provide the highest amounts of money in both years which were 175.5
m
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 in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018.Another source of payment was local taxes which were 91.2m and 102.3m in 2017 and 2018 ,respectively.
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, some of the
police
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budget
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 were provided by other sources
for example
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 grants which were 38m in 2017 and 38.5m in 2018.
Finally
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, the total amount of financial support which was given to the
police
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budget
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 was 318.6m in 2018.
According to
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 the given pie charts, the
budget
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 was distributed in three categories including salaries,technology,and building and transport.The amount of money which was spent on salaries was higher than the other groups and was 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018.
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, the least wealth was distributed in the field of technology which was increased in 2018.At
last
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, in 2017 and 2018, 17% of the allocated fund was spent on building and transport.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, police, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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