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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph compares the
amount
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 of
books
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 read by male and female individuals at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
quantity
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 of
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 read by both genders increased considerably from 2011 to 2014. It is interesting to note that the number of
books
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 that
read
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 by women has experienced the sharpest growth over the same given period shown. Looking at the graph in more detail, the
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 of
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 read by men rose moderately from 5000 to 10000 between the years 2011 and 2013.
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, in 2014, that situation changed and gave the place to a gentle decline.
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, the
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 of
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 read by female individuals grew steadily from 3000 to 4000 between the years 2011 and 2012. After 2012, it climbed dramatically from 4000 to 10000 in just a year,
moreover
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, the number of
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 read by women reached the
peakest
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weakest
 point (over 14000
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)
in
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 the end of the year 2014.
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