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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 figure depicts the shopping in the city of Brandfield in
tow
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two
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 potential locations. It is clear from the  map
thet
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that
 the
river
start
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starts
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 from the north to the west of the mall.
According to
 what is
showen
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shown
 we can notice that the golf course and the park
in
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on
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 the west side of the mall and
complet
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completely
 to the south
to
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of
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 the
river
, and it is
connacted
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connected
 to the road from the east side.The road from the east side
complet
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complete
 to cut the
Houes
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House
 Estate and the railway with the
river
.
Moreover
, the railway
connect
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 the city
center
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centre
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 and the Industrial estate
ditactly
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directly
 from the north to the east. We can notice the
river
start
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starts
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 from the north to the west
sruonded
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surrounded
 by the all places and cut the City
center
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centre
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 from the middle.
To sum up
, we could say that the railway
connacted
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connected
 with all erya and started from S1 point to S2 in the south.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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