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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic illustrates the process of how an Australian town collects
rain
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rainwater
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water
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 in order to be used as drinking
water
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. In general,
rain
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rainwater
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water
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 can be consumed after it has been processed through filtering and treating it with chemicals.
Initially
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, once the
rain drops
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raindrops
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, it runs down the pipe and ends in a drain at the bottom of each
houses
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house
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. After that, it is passed along
underground
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an underground
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 drain to enter the
water
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 filter.
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Water
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A water
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 filter is used to remove impurities that might be contained in the
water
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. Following that, it continues along the pipe to the
water
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 storage and
ready
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is ready
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 for the next step which is
water
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 treatment. In
this
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 step, the
water
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 is given some chemicals so that it can be used safely. When the
water
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 is ready, it travels along the pipe and leads to the tap in each
houses
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house
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.
Finally
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, it is ready to be consumed.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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