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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart provides the proportion of mobile phone
sales
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 by five different brands worldwide from 2009 to 2013.
Overall
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, Nokia had the highest
sales
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 in the market between 2009 and 2011
while
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 Samsung became the most popular in 2013. The number of Samsung's phone
sales
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 globally significantly increased doubled from 2009 to 2013.
In addition
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, Apple
also
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 shared a higher ratio with smaller unit
sales
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 every 3 years. It accounted for 25 , 100 and 150, respectively.
In Contrast
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, Nokia slightly decreased every year. A gap of 10 was seen between Nokia's unit
sales
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 from 2009 to 2011 afterwards it dropped to 250 in the year 2013. For the LG brand, it gradually decreased by the same amount from 120 to 80 in the years 2009 and 2013.
On the other hand
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, the ZTE brand was approximated to increase equally in three different years
nonetheless
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 it was the lowest market share in the year 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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