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The best way for governments to solve traffic congestion is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day and seven days a week.Do you agree or disagree.

#governments #traffic #congestion #transport #hours #seven #week
In
this
urgeoning
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burgeoning
 world,congestion on
road
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roads
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 has been a significant
issues
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issue
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 in
the
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city-centric life.It is universally acknowledged that the public
transportation
 system plays an indispensable role to resolve the problems of
traffic
 congestion. It is
sometime
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 argued that the
full time
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full-time
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 service of free public
transportations
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transportation
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 regulated by governments can solve
this
 difficulty.
For
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 my perspective,I disagree with
this
 view since it has some negative feedback to society. First and foremost,
this
 free
tranportation
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transportation
 service can alleviate the
traffic
 jams on the street.
This
 can help people to reduce dependence on their private vehicles.To be specific,if individuals are likely to use
transport
 for free to get around,it will reduce
cost
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costs
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 and raise money. In
this
 case,more and more people are willing to enjoy
this
 free service,reducing the volume of
traffic
 on the road significantly.
On the other hand
,free public
transportation
 at all
time
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times
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 can produce pressure on society.Free public
transport
 is likely to increase the burden on taxpayers.Governments are compelled to be responsible for
costs
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the costs
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 of public
transportation
.Because money earned from tickets can be used in the maintenance of bus stops, railway stations and vehicles.
Therefore
this
 is a huge loss by making travelling fares free for everyone.
Additionally
,there will be more
crowd
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crowds
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in
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on
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 public
transport
 which will make the journey uncomfortable for some people like
a
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senior
citizen
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citizens
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, children and pregnant ladies.
For example
, in a fully occupied bus, a pregnant lady may not get a seat. The budget is another loss for the authority from
this
 action.
To conclude
although
 free public
transport
 benefits the issues of
traffic
 jams it still leaves issues over the peak time.Other regulations,
such
 as limitations on trips and
development
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the development
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 of public
transportation
,are
also
 practical strategies to alleviate
this
 issue.
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