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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart depicts the percentage of the sector contributions to India’s gross from 1960 to 2000. It is clear from the graph that there
were
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decreased
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 in
the
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agriculture from 60% to ~15%.
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 what is shown
since
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from
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 1960 to 1980 the
industry
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 and the service
have
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stable increased, but in 1995 the services started to
be
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double
than
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that
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the
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of the
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 agricultural and the
industry
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 with ~45
percent
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 to ~65
present
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per cent
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 in 2000.
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, the
industry
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 has varied grew all over the years.
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,
the
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agriculture has
shiny
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shinily
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 decreased to more than half between 1960 and 1990 with 30% to 65%.
To sum up
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, we could say that there was a shiny increase in
the
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apply
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services, but
the
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apply
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agricultural
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agriculture
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 and
the
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apply
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industry
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 have
fell
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fallen
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 respectively in the
last
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 two years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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