Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. However, more people live in smaller towns. What are these problems living in large cities? Advantages and disadvantages.

The
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massive number of
people
prefer to
living
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live
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in large
cities
.
However
, living in large
cities
make a lot of problems for individuals. In
this
essay, I will write
the
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causes of living in
cities
. A huge number of individuals who live in
the
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big
cities
,
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can afford to
living
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luxury
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life
. First of all, if
people
become
a
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rich, they will buy a house in the large
cities
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city
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center
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centre
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. All rich
people
build the building for themselves.
Then
, huge
cities
appeared and increase taxes. Second of all, slowly build the factory, skyscrapers and so forth.
This buildings
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This building
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changed the
air
quality. Because the factory produces things which
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are
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is suit
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itself and have a big problem from factory.
For instance
,
a
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many individuals
injured
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are injured
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by
air
quality.
Air
is part of
life
.
Finally
,
people
make a challenging
life
for themselves. Because they try to earn more money and spend all the time
for
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on
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their job. They tend to make
a
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money and
addicted
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are addicted
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to money.
However
, they forget the best thing
of
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in
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life
.
On the other hand
,
a
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half
percentage
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percent
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of
people
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the people
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living
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live
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in
the
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smaller
towns
. Because
this
way comfortable where is living in tiny
towns
. First of all, small
cities
have
a breathtaking views
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breathtaking views
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, rural beauty and
air
quality.
People
build the garden. It can help
the
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people
which
is breathe
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is breathing
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deeply and
eating
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eat
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natural fruits or vegetables . Tiny
towns
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townspeople
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people
have a
beautifully
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beautiful
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life
. Because they know things
what
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that
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is the best of
life
. Second of all, small
towns
have
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do have
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not any kind of factories and some
towns
located
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are located
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on a covered mountain. It has various benefits.
For example
,
people
can see breathtaking views when they open the window. It can help to pick up energy and inspires the beginning of a new day.
Best
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feeling is that you enjoy the outdoor space. It has no
any
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problems. Just you know how to live the
life
. It is concluded that living in large
cities
have
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has
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a problems
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a problem
problems
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.
However
, a massive number of
people
prefer to
living
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live
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in large
towns
. A minority of
people
prefer
to
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apply
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smaller
towns
to live
.
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in.
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In
this
essay, I write
the
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both sides of
cities
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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