The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
Given is the chart providing statistics about issues, which are reported the most in the cities of The United Kingdom within one year in 2008.
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, what stands out from the graph is that the majority of complaints were related to Health Services and only in Glasgow and London the ones from the Education sector slightly outweighed them. In stark contrast to Linking Words
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, people were the least concerned about air pollution.
Looking in more detail, the highest percentage of reports about the Healthcare system came from Belfast, Cardiff and Birmingham almost reaching the point of 60%. The second highest were New Castle, Manchester and London reporting just above 50%. In Glasgow, Linking Words
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Turning to the second the most important problem - Education, it accounted for more than half of the complaints in all the above-mentioned cities, except Newcastle and Glasgow.
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