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The government should ban smoking in all public places, even though this would restrict some other people's freedoms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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it is a fact that smoking is injurious to health but still, most individuals smoke as part of their lifestyle. The majority of folks are of the opinion that high authorities should ban smoking as it is against ethics doing so, would restrict personal freedom. I agree with the statement because it is the leading cause of many diseases, adding pollutants to the atmosphere. I will elaborate on
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 in my essay below.
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 with, a plethora of folks who smoke more often their fumes can cause irritation to the next person sitting to them
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, it can
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 lead a person towards serious health issues
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 as asthma tb and lung cancer.
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, it is the duty of high authorities to ban smoke in public areas and make specific places for them
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 it might limit folks' privilege.
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, Asian
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 do smoking openly,
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 a clear note is written on the box that it is fatal for their health but still
people
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 do smoking.
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, advanced technologies introduce different types of smoking gadgets like e-cigarettes. vape and huka and most of our youth are involved in
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 and their fumes can damage our ozone layer day by day.
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 are unable to take pure oxygen from the air
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, it makes the air unhealthy and that's why most individuals suffer from various kinds of diseases.
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 may create a bad image of the young generation towards other nations. In conclusion,
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 it can take freedom from many
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 but it is for the sake of the whole society. It is the job of the ministry to make strict rules and regulations for smokers in order to save the lives of many humans and clear the air from impurities.
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