The table shows information about department stores and online stores in Australia in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The table demonstrates information about
department
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stores
in Australia in 2011
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Overall
, the number of businesses in Australia was highly different. Linking Words
Department
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stores
are fewer than online Use synonyms
stores
301 people.
It can be seen in the table that the profit at online Use synonyms
stores
is more than Use synonyms
department
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stores
56 million AUD.
In other, the sales revenue of online Use synonyms
stores
was much higher than in Use synonyms
department
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stores
. Can see that different cause online they sell 13400 million AUD, Use synonyms
besides
that Linking Words
department
store only sales 12700 million AUD.
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Finally
, the percentage of the growth, at online Linking Words
stores
the percentage is 0.6%, but in the Use synonyms
department
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stores
just 0.4%. online more than Use synonyms
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0.2%.Use synonyms
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