Some people think that the support of celebrities for international aid organisations draws attention to their causes, while others think celebrity support makes their causes seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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international aid organisation can help raise awareness for their cause, some argue that
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just draws attention away from the real issue. Those in favour might argue that high-profile personalities garner greater support because, as a pop-culture-driven society, we are more likely to follow where the rich and famous lead.
While
this
may be true, it
also
paints us as selfish sheep unable to care about each other’s struggles until a famous person makes caring “cool.” Unfortunately, the notion that fame is synonymous with value is a pervasive one, but I hold humanity in much higher esteem. Consider the many floods and bushfires that ravage Australia each year. Every time, the nation pulls together to feed, house, and clothe victims without the slightest prompting from the likes of Johnny Depp or Beyoncé.
Similarly
, Vladimir Putin’s recent atrocities have been globally denounced in a wave of tangible support for Ukraine without any need for celebrity intervention. There is
also
the potential for celebrities to use a good cause to prop up their sagging careers or detract from it via the “guilty-by-association” mindset so prevalent in our
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collective psyche. The “tall poppy” falls from grace, and everything (and everyone) with whom they are associated is
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thrown into doubt. Ultimately, those of us who prefer our charities star-free are arguing for a clear separation of heart and ego and a deeper trust in humanity‘s inherent goodness. As we eventually outgrow
this
“fame equals value” nonsense, I believe we will see a steady decline in celebrity representation for charities of all kinds and a sharp increase in our collective intelligence. As for our capacity to care (for me, at least), it was never in question.
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