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In many countries, senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn’t justified. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #positions #salaries #workers #company #people #isn’t
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this
 current world, several
persons
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 assume that the salary given to employees is determined by the seniority position in many companies, which is unjustified. I disagree with the second
opinions
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opinion
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, and
this
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further
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it further
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.
To begin
 with, there are two reasons why I disagree with the cited issue. The most important factor is novice
worker
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workers
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 may require extra cost for guidance and supervision to accomplish their work as a part of on-the-job training.
This
 is because they
not
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are not
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 fully able to do the task at hand independently and requires a learning phase. In stark contrast with experienced labourers, they could complete their
task
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tasks
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 autonomously and might be faster and cost less than novice
worker
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workers
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.
As a result
, those who have worked longer in a
company
 are considered more economically favourable than new workers.
Moreover
, to support my argument, Thera
two
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 diversity from senior and junior
employer
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employers
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. Old people have more weight in the loyalty section, where they have contributed to making their
company
 more valuable.
while
 those who are still relatively new do not have it.
this
 is what makes those who are senior in the
company
 deserve more rewards, one of which is a bigger salary. Taking everything into consideration. I disagree that salaries are given equally without considering seniority. on the one
hand
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 most new workers need additional costs to learn.
while
 senior workers tend to make the
company
 more profitable.
moreover
, people who have been there for a long time have
also
 contributed to building the
company
 has more value.
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