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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, adn make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, adn make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate
Canadians
' favourite takeaways and the amount of
Indian
 Restaurants in
Canada
 between 1960 and 2015. The measurement is given by percentage for the
favorite
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favourite
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 takeaways and the number from 0-10000 for
Indian
 food stores.
Overall
, the most liked cuisines in
Canada
is
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are
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 from Thailand.
While
, the least cuisines liked are from Japan, Mexico, and Greece.
Moreover
,
Indian
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India
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 became Canadian's favourite
meals
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meal
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 after Thai and
the
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apply
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Indian
 restaurants were expanding largely from 1960 to 2015. To start with,
Canadians
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Canadians'
Canadian's
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 least favourite meals are Japanese, Mexican and Greece which have similar
percentage
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percentages
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,
which
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just 1%. Chinese and the other menu
also
 did not popular in
Canada
, they only consumed it by 3% and 4%, respectively.
The
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 other side, there are a lot of
Canadians
consumed
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who consumed
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 Italian and Persian foods (10% and 9%, respectively).
Lastly
, the most ordered
takeways
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takeaways
takeaway
 were from Thai (34%) and
Indian
 (26%).
However
, there are 11%
Canadians
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of Canadians
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who
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apply
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did not like to order anything. Because
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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Indian's
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Indian
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 food popularity
spreaded
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spread
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 in
Canada
, the number of
Indian
 restaurants
were
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was
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also
 increasing
by
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over
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the
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apply
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time. In 1960, there were only less than 2000
Indian
 food stores. But, in 2015 the stores became wider and hit
to
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apply
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almost 10000
takeaways
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takeaway
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 places.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canadians, indian, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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