The map shows how coastal land develops into a coastal park.
The two maps describe the improvement of coastal land change to coastal
park
. Fix the agreement mistake
parks
Overall
, it is clear that
the development includes more trees, green space and facilities for residents. To begin
with, what once were animal's
area and unused land converted Change noun form
animal
to take
a circular lake with a lot of trees taking a place around the lake. Verb problem
into
Moreover
, The agricultural area alter to
woods with Verb problem
has
a
trees twice the lake size e. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, They linked the previous two areas with the footpath and car park in the centre, regard to replace
the old fam building Wrong verb form
regarding replacing
to
Change preposition
with
new
car Correct article usage
a new
Park
. Fix capitalization
park
Secondly
, new cafe
were built Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
southern
the road, Change preposition
on southern
the
main road and cliffs remained untouched. Correct word choice
and the
thirdly
, many facilities after evolution are there , they add steps at the side of the cliff to the resident
.Replace the word
residence
Finally
, after the improvement
a lot of people visit the beach. Add a comma
improvement,
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