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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smart phone, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas knowledge and experience, and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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work
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worker
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. It is a strongly argued topic that many
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 actuality. In
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work
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 that need to drive, they can save some money
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 petrol, if they
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, for others,
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work
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 can decrease cost on
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, lots of
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 by train or bus,
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, these transports are not free.
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, the biggest advantage of
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Other significant benefit
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 can reduce accidents.
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,
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 are able
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 working on time.
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outside, have many potential dangers.
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 sometimes have different accidents.
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, drivers have terrible car accidents.
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,
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 if they meet heavy congestion. For some
people
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 that need to by bus or train, bus or train
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lately
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 to late for
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. What’s more,
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 can efficiently decline exhaust pollution,
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 number of carbon dioxide is decreased. Air quality has really made an improvement in urban. Whilst,
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work
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also
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 have disadvantages. The biggest
drawbacks
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 of
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 is that
people
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face to
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face
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 communication.
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internet
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the internet
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a discussion
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in
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home
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workers
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 usually have online meetings. But
people
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 always won’t have a
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face
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 communication is the better way.
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, for some
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, they won’t concentrate on
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their jobs
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. There are too many distractions
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home
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, some
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. In conclusion, as can be seen from the points made in
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work
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home
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 have aspects of positive and negative. In my opinion,
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 can find
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work
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office
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. Take advantage
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