IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

Some teachers think it is effective for students to study in groups while others think is it better to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#teachers #students #study #groups
There are loads of approaches to the
study
. Some teachers tend to push students to work in groups, others to
study
 on their own.
This
 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in
favor
Change the spelling
favour
show examples
 of the latter. On one side, studying in groups might be a way to pick up people who don’t like school in general and, equally important, to share information and make them circulate.
For example
, when I was a student, I struggled to deal with some matters, and it was helpful to
study
 with friends or schoolmates better prepared with or suitable with some topics.
On the other hand
, I loved spending time alone without any kind of interference effect. I like to walk through an object on my own,
define
Correct word choice
and define
show examples
 targets,
timeline
Fix the agreement mistake
timelines
show examples
, and
method
Fix the agreement mistake
methods
show examples
 to apply
at
Change preposition
apply
show examples
. It is a sort of full immersion in a topic reflecting your ability and interpretation of what you dove in. In my opinion, I definitely prefer to
study
 alone rather than being part of
group
Add an article
the group
a group
show examples
 as I don’t want to waste time in some way, and I think
this
 approach is more effective than others at all. In conclusion, there
two
Add a missing verb
are two
show examples
 main
school
Change to a plural noun
schools
show examples
 of thought comparing studying in
group
Correct article usage
a group
show examples
 and alone. The first approach promotes the sharing of information and the
collecting
Replace the word
collection
show examples
most
Change preposition
of most
show examples
 of the students, even
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
show examples
doesn’t
Correct subject-verb agreement
don’t
show examples
 like
school
Correct article usage
the school
show examples
 environment. The second approach tends to stimulate those who love to achieve precise goals and follow defined work schedules. I am ultimately an alone student.
Submitted by nicolavistoli on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: