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The chart below shows the changes in sales of four different types of books from 2002 to 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in sales of four different types of books from 2002 to 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the distribution of
books
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 sold across four different
book
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 categories in terms of thousand unit
copies
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sales
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 between 2002 and 2012.
Overall
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, the proportion of history
books
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 was the most significant
book
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sales
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while
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 the proportion of hobbies
books
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 was at least.
However
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, entertainment
books
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 and art
books
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 were
similarly
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 grown up in every year.
According to
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 the graph, history
books
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 were the leader in
book
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sales
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 every two-different years. It dramatically rose from 4 to 10 unit
sales
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 from 2002 to 2008, respectively, Even though, the ratio of unit
sales
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 dropped but it still rose in the years 2012.
In addition
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, the number of art
book
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sales
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 gradually increased every year from 2
copies
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sales
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 to 4
copies
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sales
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.
On the other hand
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, the number of hobbies
books
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sales
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 slightly increased from almost 1 thousand
copies
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sales
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 to approximately 2 from 2002 to 2006. Before, it was equally represented the same ratio to the year 2012. Entertainment
books
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 relatively increased from 2002 to 2012 more than 1 thousand
copies
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sales
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, book, copies, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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