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Many parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. To what extent do you agree?

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Some
parents
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 feel that their
children
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 can surely succeed if put under incredible
pressure
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. I absolutely disagree with
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. In my opinion,
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 should be given the courage to fail and the freedom to succeed on their own terms.
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 essay will discuss why certain
parents
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 believe the requirement of
pressure
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 in their
children
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's growth and why some people, including myself, do not agree with
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 belief.


Children
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 tend to feel tremendous stress under
pressure
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 which makes them do whatever is required of them, unfortunately,
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 requirement is usually a
success
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 parameter defined by
parents
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. With
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 experiments, even though they seem to find a formula for their child's
success
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, it messes up the child's psychological well-being. One of my friends was growing up in a harsh and high-
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 environment, where his
parents
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 used to lock him up for months before examinations, until one day, when he committed suicide to put a stop to his stressful life.
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 is the reason, putting a lot of
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 could have both harmful and life-threatening effects. 

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, letting kids define their
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 and failure is liberating for both kids and
parents
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 as they get the opportunity to freely build their character and personality. People function differently under
pressure
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, and it can be rewarding to let
children
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 decide what works for them.
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 not only sets them on the path to
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 but
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 encourages them to make informed decisions. 


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, people of certain demographics feel the need to put a lot of
pressure
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 on their
children
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 in order to see them succeed.
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 many argue that
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 is the right way to raise
children
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, I completely disagree with
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 and believe it could have many negative implications like
children
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 succumbing under
pressure
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, growing psychologically numb etc.
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, it is best to let them discover their own distinct ways of achieving
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.
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