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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The figure depicts a line graph illustrating the
amount
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 of money spent on books over the span of a decade, in four countries: Germany,
France
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, Italy and
Austria
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. Germany clearly spent the most on books over the course of the decade, spending at least $
15million
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15 million
 more than
France
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 at any given point. The most they spent was in 2005, spending approximately $95million. From 1995 to 2005, there was a general
increase
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 in expenditure, despite a drop in 2003.
France
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 followed Germany, being the country to spend the second highest
amount
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. There was a steady
increase
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 in the total spent, from 1995 to 2005. In 1997,
France
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 and Italy spent almost the same
amount
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,
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however
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France
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 maintained
it's
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its
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 second
postion
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position
. Italy and
Austria
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 spent the least
amount
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 of money on books. Before 2003, Italy had spent more than
Austria
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,
however
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 after 2003,
Austria
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 had overtaken Italy in book expense. The sharp
increase
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 between 2001 and 2003 for
Austria
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 caused the change in sequence, pushing Italy to
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the final
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 position.
Austria
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 showed a general
increase
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 in
expense
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,
whereas
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 Italy's line graph had a dip in 1999.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, france, austria, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending patterns
  • steady increase
  • notable growth
  • highest spending
  • moderate increase
  • significant growth
  • comparative analysis
  • cultural investment
  • economic trends
  • over the period
  • consistently higher
  • between X and Y
  • relative starting point
  • year-on-year increase
  • expenditure on books
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