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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates how much currency has been spent on books from 1995 to 2005 in
Germany
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, France, Italy and
Autralia
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Australia
.
Overall
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, as we can see,
Australia
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had
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had the highest increase, and
on the other hand
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, Italy
had
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had the lowest rise. In 1995,
Germany
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 had the greatest spending by about 80
million
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 dollars which was twice much more than
Australia
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.
Germany
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,
Australia
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 and France had
an
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 gradual equal growth which was approximately 10
million
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 between 1995 and 1999. Italy;
however
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, had
moderate
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a moderate
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 increase in 1997 and
then
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 experienced a slight fall in 1999. In 1999, the amount of money spent in
Australia
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 remained stable which was 40
million
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 dollars. The
expedinture
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expenditure
 in
Germany
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 decreased moderately to around 85
million
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 in 2003.
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, the currency spent in France and Italy,respectively, rose significantly which reached
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70
million
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 and
by
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about 55
million
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 in 2001 respectively.
Then
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 in
2005
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,2005
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 all countries reached their peak in which
Germany
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 had the highest that was approximately 95
million
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. In comparison, Italy with the lowest rank which was just a little over 60
million
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 dollars.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, australia, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending patterns
  • steady increase
  • notable growth
  • highest spending
  • moderate increase
  • significant growth
  • comparative analysis
  • cultural investment
  • economic trends
  • over the period
  • consistently higher
  • between X and Y
  • relative starting point
  • year-on-year increase
  • expenditure on books
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