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Public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #books #waste #resources #media #software #videos #dvds
Public
libraries
 are a source of free knowledge for those who visit - the resources can be in the form of
books
, or they can be in the form of different
media
, which is why I disagree with the statement. Personally, I believe that all types of
media
 should be available for public use - not just
books
.
Technology
 is advancing at an exponential rate,
with
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and with
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 that the different forms of
media
 are evolving.
Books
 are no longer the only resource for learning and as
libraries
 are historically the centre for learning, they must
also
 adapt to suit modern times. From an economic standpoint, investing in high-tech
media
 attracts individuals with the need for these resources -
such
 as students.
This
 means more individuals will visit the library, making it a popular attraction and
thus
increase
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 the need for the public library to exist, encouraging the government to fund
libraries
further
. As
technology
 changes, the need for videos and DVDs may become
obselete
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obsolete
,
thus
 investing in other forms of high-tech
media
 will allow
libraries
 to continue to be a needed resource. Many resources are available at a push of a button, on phones and laptops,
thus
libraries
 should keep up to date with
technology
 advancements to ensure they too do not become
obselete
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obsolete
. As a child, I would go to the library to read the
books
 my family couldn't afford to buy me. As a school student, I went to take advantage of the silence, to study. As an adult, I go to find journals and articles I can use for free. There will always be a need for
libraries
, despite the advancement in
technology
,
thus
 it is better to ride the wave than to fight against change.
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