As housing is a basic need for people, the government should provide free housing for everyone who can’t afford it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the cost of homes is increasing at an alarming rate. The apartments are a basic necessity for individuals, the governments should give free accommodation for each and everyone who can not bear it. Personally, I completely agree with

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standpoint because it benefits both individuals and society as a whole.

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if everyone owns a house, people have more money to spend on other things.

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, they will buy new clothes, increase disposable income and they will spend on luxurious items but in fact, the population will change the product more often than in their life. The result of higher spending would lead to inflation in the economy. But we must observe realistically that the government collects taxes from the citizens of the country. So the responsibility lies in officials to take care of the individuals who have been living and working in these countries and make sure nobody is left homeless. They should build new buildings to accommodate people who cannot afford

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expensive properties. When they do that, there will be a lot of benefits.

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will help to reduce poverty in the country because

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of spending an enormous amount of money to buy a house , they can use

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money for their life to get food.

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the crime rate since the poor will do anything to steal valuable things that they are not able to afford. In conclusion, with the aforementioned, I totally agree with the idea

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a free house for people who can not afford it is applicable because of the benefits it brings.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Basic need
Affordable housing
Social contract
Taxpayer burden
Social equity
Dependency
Incentives
Financial self-improvement
Underprivileged
Government assistance
Inequality reduction
Social mobility
Housing subsidies
Human right
Obligation
Safe housing

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