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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not
#show #uk #graduate #student
The two bar charts present
the
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information about graduate and postgraduate students of different types of future
plane
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plans
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 without full-time
work
 in the UK in 2008. An obvious feature is that all types of destination
were remained
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remained
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the
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 same rank for both of the two bar charts. Students who opted
further
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for further
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 study where occupy the majority and the voluntary
work
 were
fewest
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the fewest
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 people to choose
for
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from
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 both. Most graduates went to do
further
 study, the number
were
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 almost to reach 30,000.
Conversely
, Voluntary
work
were
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 unpopular, at 3,500. Part-time
work
 and Unemployment where shared
the
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 similar number for graduates,
which
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at 17,735 and 16,235 respectively. Notably, the number of postgraduates who did the
further
 study was similar to part-time
work
 people, they only got a gap of 190 people.
Postgraduate
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Postgraduates
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 who
unemployed
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were unemployed
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 were at 1,625 and
who
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those who
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 did voluntary were the fewest
by
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apply
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others,
which
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only at 345.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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