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One of the highly discussed issues is that some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes, it is undeniable that community service is the good deeds that erase trash from the street and improve social awareness and it is become essential part of responsibilities

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One of the highly discussed issues is that some
people
 believe that unpaid
community
service
 should be a compulsory part of high school programmes, it is undeniable that
community
service
 is the good deeds that erase trash from the street and improve social awareness and it
is become
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essential
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 part of responsibilities,
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 there is no absolute agreement between should students of high school doing
community
service
 working
witn
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with
 no paid, some
people
 finds it beneficial to our society, but the other side
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 with
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 mind. Surely there
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 pros and cons to working for society with no payment, but I believe
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 will be more than
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 One of the main positive is that
this
 sort of
work
, will provide a lot of benefits to
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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 or to the poor
people
,
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 cleaning
mess
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 in
neighbourhood
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 will give
people
 a good attitude and will increase
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 reputation. Another advantage of
this
 type of
work
 is that
student
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 can invite
people
 to help others and promote social stability and welfare,
thus
this more and more
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people
 will invite each other and will
work
 unselfishly
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, turning to the other side of the argument, they
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 the main problem of
this
 idea is the time, it means that pupils cannot get enough time for their routine and interests and even not getting paid. Another major
disadventages
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disadvantage
disadvantages
 is that
community
service
 is the
hardwork
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hard work
 and
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 to
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quote
 "every
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
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" Having
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heightened
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weighed
 everything
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mentioned
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, we
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cam
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 come to
a
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 conclusion that
this
 type of
work
 is unfair in my opinion, and it is quite exhausting
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