One of the highly discussed issues is that some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes, it is undeniable that community service is the good deeds that erase trash from the street and improve social awareness and it is become essential part of responsibilities

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One of the highly discussed issues is that some

people

believe that unpaid

community

service

should be a compulsory part of high school programmes, it is undeniable that

community

service

is the good deeds that erase trash from the street and improve social awareness and it

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part of responsibilities,

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there is no absolute agreement between should students of high school doing

community

service

working

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no paid, some

people

finds it beneficial to our society, but the other side

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pros and cons to working for society with no payment, but I believe

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will give

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reputation. Another advantage of

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the main problem of

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idea is the time, it means that pupils cannot get enough time for their routine and interests and even not getting paid. Another major

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conclusion that

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is unfair in my opinion, and it is quite exhausting

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