An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

Cosmetic surgery is an effective way to change the
appearance
of a person. The prevalence of individuals changing the way they look is increasing. I think
people
do it because they are not satisfied
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their
appearance
and the cost of cosmetic
surgeries
is decreasing which I believe, are negative developments. The reason why
people
are not satisfied with their looks and still
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surgeries
despite the high price and negative effects is
due to
the
appearance
of celebrities and influencers, who sets the standard image of a person.
For example
, models like Kendall Jenner, who posted her doll-like
appearance
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social media platforms where most
of
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people
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their time.
This
action may lead to negative effects especially in teens and young adults because it could distort their minds and attitudes to themselves and to other
people
. Those who are
emotional
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vulnerable could
also
experience mental health problems
such
as depression and anorexia.
Additionally
,
due to
the advancement of medical science, the price of plastic
surgeries
is getting cheaper,
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even low to middle-class earners
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to afford the operations.
For instance
, many facilities in South Korea are able to increase their revenues because of the low prices they offer on operations like
a
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double-eyelid surgery. Most
of
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Koreans are born with one eyelid only and in their country, having two
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is considered beautiful which was influenced by the
western
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nations. In conclusion, I think
this
should be seen as a negative development because individuals are not able to be contented with their looks
due to
the
appearance
they have seen from other
people
and the rate of getting cosmetic
surgeries
nowadays is cheaper.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Idealized beauty standards
  • Cosmetic surgery
  • Advancements in medical technology
  • Socially acceptable
  • Self-improvement
  • Psychological well-being
  • Competitive workforce
  • Youthful appearance
  • Body dysmorphic disorder (BDD)
  • Physical appearance
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