An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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Cosmetic surgery is an effective way to change the
appearance
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of a person. The prevalence of individuals changing the way they look is increasing. I think
people
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do it because they are not satisfied
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their
appearance
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and the cost of cosmetic
surgeries
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is decreasing which I believe, are negative developments. The reason why
people
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are not satisfied with their looks and still
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surgeries
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despite the high price and negative effects is
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the
appearance
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of celebrities and influencers, who sets the standard image of a person.
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, models like Kendall Jenner, who posted her doll-like
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social media platforms where most
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people
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their time.
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action may lead to negative effects especially in teens and young adults because it could distort their minds and attitudes to themselves and to other
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. Those who are
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vulnerable could
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experience mental health problems
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as depression and anorexia.
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the advancement of medical science, the price of plastic
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is getting cheaper,
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even low to middle-class earners
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to afford the operations.
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, many facilities in South Korea are able to increase their revenues because of the low prices they offer on operations like
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double-eyelid surgery. Most
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Koreans are born with one eyelid only and in their country, having two
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is considered beautiful which was influenced by the
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nations. In conclusion, I think
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should be seen as a negative development because individuals are not able to be contented with their looks
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the
appearance
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they have seen from other
people
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and the rate of getting cosmetic
surgeries
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nowadays is cheaper.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Idealized beauty standards
  • Cosmetic surgery
  • Advancements in medical technology
  • Socially acceptable
  • Self-improvement
  • Psychological well-being
  • Competitive workforce
  • Youthful appearance
  • Body dysmorphic disorder (BDD)
  • Physical appearance
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