The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
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the average percentages in some specific meals of three
differents
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of nutrients, namely
sodium
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, saturated fat and added sugar. These are bad for health if people consume too much.
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, it is clear from the information provided that
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breakfast was the lowest
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of all three. The consumption for dinner was the highest
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in
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sodium
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and saturated fat,
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snacks
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the highest
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added sugar. Looking first at the
sodium
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and saturated fat, dinner has the highest
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, which accounts for 43% and 37% respectively. The snacks and breakfast were the same at 14% in
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they were much higher in the figure for saturated fat, accounting for 21% and 16% respectively. Turning to the remaining item, there are 42%
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from added sugar, which is the largest percentage. Following it, dinner is in second place, being 23%. The proportions for breakfast and lunch were 16% and 19% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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