the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
The bar chart gives information about how much electricity has been used and produced among the top 10 countries in 2014.
Overall
, there is no doubt that China and the United States are leaders in these statistics. At the top of the chart located China producing 5398
billion
, and using 5322
billion
of electricity. In second place is the United States which consumes 3866
billion
, but produces 4099
billion
. After these two ,countries the indications dropped dramatically.
For instance
, the third is Russia with 1057 and 1038
billion
in production and consumption, respectively. Followed by Japan and India with quite similar numbers. After 5 places there is Canada which produces 618.9
,
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and uses 499.9
billion
of electricity.
Furthermore
, there are France and Brazil manufacture 561.2 and 530.7
billion
respectively. The consumption
rates
of these countries are less than their production
rates
. After
that is
Germany, which is the only country where using
rates
outraced the production
rates
. The
last
country is the Korean Republic which has the lowest rate among these nations
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, rates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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