Some people go shopping as a form of recreation. It has replaced the other activities that people used to do as hobbies. Is this a positive or negative development? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Shopping
is become
increasingly popular nowadays. Especially young girls and Change to the active voice
becomes
has become
also
women prefer shopping daily. They believe it is a form of recreation and enjoy it as a hobby
. In this
,essay I will discuss the causes and provide my opinion down here.
A few decades later people used to shopping once a
Change preposition
in a
while
. Now it has become a trend among ladies especially
girls. I believe social media is the main reason for Add the comma(s)
,especially
this
trend. Because some famous person show their fashions through social media and they promote latest
fashions to Correct article usage
the latest
the
society. There are some individuals, who are waiting for new releases. And Correct article usage
apply
also
some people shop as a hobby
. They just go to shopping malls for
time passes.
Change preposition
as
Secondly
, I think younger girls are pointless. They do not have any idea about do's and do nots
. But following a Correct your spelling
not
hobby
is completely different. There are only a few teenagers who have their own habits and others are all doing useless activities. This
will be a tragedy one day. Because the new generation has no responsibilities and they do what they like and have no idea about a better future. If we do any hobby
, it helps us to heal our body and relax our mind. That's why teachers advise us on these good habits.
To conclude
, anyone can go shopping and it is not harmful to anyone. But addicting is terrible and it causes for wasting money.Submitted by pmmadushani123 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite