it is important fro children to learn the difference between the right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn the distinction to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

to be honest, I agree with the opinion that it is important for
children
to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. First and foremost, most
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children
in the world have both
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.
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are covered by love from their parents. many
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think they do not need scare or
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anything as
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parents can solve all their problems. thereby
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become more and more worse in the future.
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of punishment between parents and teachers in education
children
to learn the difference between right and wrong.
since
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, make an environment for
children
improve
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themselves,
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good behaviour with people. it is really hard to teach a child
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a good person in the future. so we
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make for
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good environment since
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,
children
are lived, studied, and improved themselves. In the future,
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will make their life and have
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quality of life
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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