The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
families
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' weekly expenditure in a country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, as we can see, the most spending for
families
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in 1968 was on food, and in 2018, the most
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on leisure activities. In 1968, the highest percentage of their income was spent on food which was 35%;
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, the other spendings were much lower. Housing, clothing and footwear had the second rank with about 10% which was significantly lower than food expenditure.
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, the 4 other expenses which were household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure had an equal portion of weekly wage which was approximately 8%.
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, the least part of the spending was on providing fuel and power which were almost 6%.
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, in 2018, the trend changed and
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spent most of their weekly salary on recreational activities which was about 22%.
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, the second and the third rank were for housing with just a little under 20% and around 17% respectively.
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,
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intended to spend the lowest amount of money on fuel and power, similar to 1968, and personal goods which were approximately 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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