The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
families
' weekly expenditure in a country in 1968 and 2018. Use synonyms
Overall
, as we can see, the most spending for Linking Words
families
in 1968 was on food, and in 2018, the most Use synonyms
was
on leisure activities.
In 1968, the highest percentage of their income was spent on food which was 35%; Change the verb form
were
however
, the other spendings were much lower. Housing, clothing and footwear had the second rank with about 10% which was significantly lower than food expenditure. Linking Words
On the contrary
, the 4 other expenses which were household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure had an equal portion of weekly wage which was approximately 8%. Linking Words
Finally
, the least part of the spending was on providing fuel and power which were almost 6%.
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On the other hand
, in 2018, the trend changed and Linking Words
families
spent most of their weekly salary on recreational activities which was about 22%. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the second and the third rank were for housing with just a little under 20% and around 17% respectively. Linking Words
Finally
, Linking Words
families
intended to spend the lowest amount of money on fuel and power, similar to 1968, and personal goods which were approximately 4%.Use synonyms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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