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According to a recent study, the more people use the internet, the less time they spend with real humans begins. Should we worry about the effect this is having on social interaction or should we see the internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities worldwide? Discuss these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Some
people
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 believe that the increased usage of the
internet
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 decreases interaction with real human beings. I believe that the more
time
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 spent on the
internet
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 the less
time
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 with human beings is a negative impact on our society and
people
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 should be worried because too much
internet
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 could cause major problems in a person's physical and mental well-being.
People
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 that spend most of their
time
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 on the
internet
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 will have more physical and mental problems.
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, many work-from-home adults have inactive lifestyles that could lead to obesity and diabetes. They consumed a huge amount of food
due to
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 stress from work. These
people
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 will not likely notice their appearance until someone points out their condition. Children and teenagers who are on social media platforms could likely develop mental health problems. Those perfect images of a celebrity or an influencer could affect the way how they look at themselves. They will likely compare themselves and change their looks in order to look like their favourite idols.
Although
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 the
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 could make a new way of communication, the satisfaction of interacting with other
people
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 is more satisfying than just being able to communicate with them on the
Internet
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. Being able to talk face to face with your family and friends could ease our minds because you were able to see their actual reactions and movements. The social skills of a person will not deteriorate because they were able to use them in their daily life. In conclusion, I think that spending a huge amount of
time
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 on the
internet
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 is a negative impact on our society because our social skills will likely decrease and not improve.
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