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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
#amount #money #books #germany #france #austria
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The graph below
illustrate
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 that four
countries
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Germany
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,France,Italy and
Austria
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) spent money on books
with
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 US
dollars
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 from 1995 to 2005.İn the graph, each country is plotted with lines of a different
color
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(
Germany
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 light green,France blue,Italy Yellow and
Austria
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 dark green).
Overall
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,in the graph obviously seems that
,
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Germany
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 spent more money
for
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 books than all 3
countries
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 between 1995 and 2005 and of course clearly it seems that all
countries
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was
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 up and down in the year
of
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1995 and 2005. The spending money
for
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 books was observed
increasing
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 in three
countries
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(
Germany
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,Italy and
Austria
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).
Germany
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 spent 80
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 and growth was to 90
million
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 in 1999,
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however
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expences
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expenses
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was
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dropped to 85
million
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dollars
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 in 2003 and again raise to 95
million
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dollars
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 in 2005.
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 Italy and
Austria
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(Italy in 1995 was 50,55
million
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 was 1997,65
million
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 was 2005 and
Austria
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 in 1995 was 30,between 1999 and 2001 was constantly 40
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 and in 2005
dramaticly
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 lifted to 73
million
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).
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 France
was slightly increase
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was slightly increased
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 from 55 to 75
million
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dollars
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, germany, austria, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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