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The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the table made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the
wich
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which
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 made by a
coffee
 shop in an office building on weekends. Look at from
an
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apply
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overall
, In
office
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an office
the office
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 building 4 types of
menu
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the menu
a menu
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 of
meal
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the meal
a meal
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 and drink served
in
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on
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 weekdays,
such
 as
Coffee
, Tea,
patries
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pastries
parties
, and
sandwich
.
The
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Coffee
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coffee
 is most
purchase
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purchased
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the
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on the
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 menu
in
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on
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 the rest days,
while
 tea is
lowest
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the lowest
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 sold out.
According to
 morning
time
 between 7:30 am to 10:30 am,
coffee
 and pastries has been sold out at peak state which is 265 and 275 respectively,
whereas
sandwich
 declined to purchase by peoples, which is only 50. After next 2 hours
sandwich
 steadily rise and reach at 200,
while
 in
this
 hours teas ratio dropped down and come to 50. In the afternoon
time
,
Coffee
 and pastries hold by peoples again (140 and 150),
while
sandwich
 rapidly down (40). In the evening
time
 from 5:30 pm to 8:30 pm,
coffee
 and
sandwich
amount
 is grow,
coffee
 and pastries
amount
 fall, which is nearly 80. In the morning
time
 great purchase the meal and drink, which is total 700, after 2 hours vends total 530,
then
 in the evening and
last
 afternoon, which is lowest bought by peoples,
To sum up
 top rank sold by individuals was
coffee
 drink has been highest
amount
 earn (795), and tea has been lowest
amount
 stolen.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sandwich, time, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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