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In Spite Of The Advances Made In Agriculture, Many People Still Go Hungry

#spite #advances #agriculture #people
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Recently, there is no doubt that many advances have been made in agriculture.
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,
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 in many countries still be hungry, which has attracted
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numerous
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 the public. Today I would like to discuss its reason and share my suggestions as well.
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, it has been argued why
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 still get hungry with the development of
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agriculture.
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 its advances
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 in many ways saved
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's lives, its development can not meet the need of
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 population. What is more, one well-known nutritionist said:"The corruption from the government took the investment in
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's food."
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, some countries are still very poor. Even in a rich country, there is a big gap between different areas.
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, it is
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 clearly shown that there are many reasons to explain why many
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 are still hungry.
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problems can always be solved
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if we put
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 hearts. As far as society is concerned, the ultimate aim of society is to make
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 full physically and mentally.
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, one recent
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 published in Nelson Magazine revealed that the technology of
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agriculture should be improved
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 to meet the rapid growth of the population.
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, the government should invest more in poor areas
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 and resources. It is a clear indication that we can get many solutions to the hungry problems.
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, there are many reasons
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 the hungry problems. Luckily, we can think of heaps of solutions to it. The government and
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 should make a concerted effort to find a solution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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