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Nowadays university education is very expensive. Some people say that universities should reduce their fees, especially for the less fortunate stuvery spedents or those coming from rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is a fact that college expenditures have increased massively.
According to
 many, prices should be diminished for those who come from poverty or from less populated regions. I totally agree with
this
 view on the grounds that reducing academy expenses
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 equal opportunities and enlarges the skilled workforce. Being a university student is not every young adult's dream anymore. As
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, education has been affected by unpleasant economic realities. Particularly, economically disadvantaged high school students, which is
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 impaired group, skip
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 level of education. By reducing university costs,
however
,
this
 negative view can be shifted. Enacting suitable regulations makes high education more reachable. Satisfactory scholarship programmes or price
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 for
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destitute
 young people,
for instance
, could be seen as
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 solution.
Furthermore
, providing equal chances for everyone is of paramount importance
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 the workforce. Every
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brilliant
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turns into a quality professional. Just because
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 harsh financial status, many talented individuals are struggling to meet
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their real capacity. Those individuals are being employed as either
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 or temporary workers. Yet, with the aid of
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 policy, which is implementing expense decrement, society could have more engineers, doctors or teachers. In Turkey, owing to some big companies, destitute lycee students became brilliant professionals. In conclusion, more affordable university programmes not only
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 to fairness but
also
strenghten
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strengthen
 the country's working professional force.
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Elaborate more on main points with specific examples and further explanations.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all ideas clearly relate back to the main argument/topic to maintain clarity.
task achievement
The essay effectively establishes a clear stance and maintains focus on the issue of university education costs.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, helping give the essay a clear structure.

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